tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post3720691486876688541..comments2023-11-06T12:28:13.575-05:00Comments on A Million Monkeys: Ivan's Beanstalk, by Jon VanZileJon VanZilehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14026643422328853037noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-59883834013986709492009-09-19T13:05:37.701-04:002009-09-19T13:05:37.701-04:00Wow! I'd completely forgotten about the prompt...Wow! I'd completely forgotten about the prompt when I read this, so the nooses were a complete surprise! I love the suspense in this -- I figured out what he was doing, but the race against the protesters and wondering if he'd even be able to USE the money made it very exciting.<br /><br />Well done!Melanie Hooyengahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08781235493983907234noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-17686746784550677092009-09-18T15:52:10.475-04:002009-09-18T15:52:10.475-04:00Cool building of suspense throughout. Love the end...Cool building of suspense throughout. Love the end with the nooses, LOL! Great ending, Jon!Spy Scribblerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14299551957327543491noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-73700487459969617642009-09-18T15:33:53.278-04:002009-09-18T15:33:53.278-04:00I enjoyed how you used the prompt as inspiration, ...I enjoyed how you used the prompt as inspiration, but not necessarily as a literal interpretation of the visual.<br /><br />I also liked the beanstalk metaphor. By the end, I really wanted to see that guy get what he deserved! <br /><br />The tone of it is like if the movies "Ghost" and "Wall Street" met. In fact, maybe that would be the Hollywood pitch ;)E. Flanigannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-17201029432334331142009-09-18T15:33:51.993-04:002009-09-18T15:33:51.993-04:00I enjoyed how you used the prompt as inspiration, ...I enjoyed how you used the prompt as inspiration, but not necessarily as a literal interpretation of the visual.<br /><br />I also liked the beanstalk metaphor. By the end, I really wanted to see that guy get what he deserved! <br /><br />The tone of it is like if the movies "Ghost" and "Wall Street" met. In fact, maybe that would be the Hollywood pitch ;)E. Flanigannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-35092422985348826432009-09-18T10:44:13.429-04:002009-09-18T10:44:13.429-04:00Thanks for the feedback everybody.
My wife read ...Thanks for the feedback everybody. <br /><br />My wife read it and remarked, "Nice wish fulfillment."Jon VanZilehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14026643422328853037noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-75274833945630798172009-09-18T10:14:56.509-04:002009-09-18T10:14:56.509-04:00Intense visuals. With Ivan as the main character I...Intense visuals. With Ivan as the main character I still felt most concern and compassion for the angry mob - feeling Ivan was someone I loved to hate.Amy Sue Nathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13854920309673361956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-55502482078360907542009-09-18T10:12:03.136-04:002009-09-18T10:12:03.136-04:00I liked this a lot. Great tension build. The const...I liked this a lot. Great tension build. The construction reminded me of something Hitchcock might do.<br /><br />Nice touch with things like the thirteen-digit account number and Ivan always trying to think ahead on how to make some money from all this. I got a real feel for this character, despicable as he was.Jude Hardinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09994813046526310594noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7125214612971306615.post-55850683826816810372009-09-18T09:42:30.983-04:002009-09-18T09:42:30.983-04:00LOL. I loved this. I also felt like it was thrille...LOL. I loved this. I also felt like it was thrillerish, like I could see this as part of a bigger whole. I loved the authentification process, building tension.<br /><br />EErica Orloffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16415925758466527671noreply@blogger.com